Monday, April 10, 2017

"this beach of pebbles"



The poem below received a mention in the sixth edition of the SGP (Sharpening the Green Pencil Contest). It can be considered as a model of bouncing the ordinary life towards the area of allegory.

this beach of pebbles
after the wave
my life rearranged

Gregory PIKO
Yass, AUSTRALIA

I think the focus is on this – “this beach of pebbles”. This very beach I contemplate and recall now. This beach which reveals something unexpected and fascinating to me. This very beach which I propose to you as an object of admiration and meditation. The colloquial language knows how to say, elliptically and concisely, just what there is to say. It does not charge the text with details and descriptive adjectives. That is enough and also very expressive, it calls you over there, to see, to feel and to understand the situation.

The text continues as laconic as before, and, finally, skids more than suggestively, from what the wave really does - it draws the pebbles and leaves them in a new, different order - towards an effect that is entirely implausible – it (re)orders the author’s life (or the reader’s, if he also consents to this revelation). Through this simple substitution of the image of the relentless change of the pebbles’ ordering, moved away by the waves at the same time with human life, what we see is a teaching, and the text acquires the aesthetic value of a haiku.

Revelation, in the human sequence, is actually an assumption under the sway of an image that becomes a vision. There is no disorder, any change under the incessant assault of the waves of life is another unexpected and wondrous order. Thi wave is only the moment when someone has understood and has reconciled with his fate. The pebbles have long known this. And were always saying it, but in vain. The poem tells it to us without insisting, it gives us only food for thought. It draws our attention to the fact that it's already happened to someone.

(Comment by Corneliu Traian Atanasiu)

Romanian Monthly Kukai March 2017

Theme: using the word freesia



Special Prize

rainy day -
withered on the windowsill
a freesia

(Sabina Ciobanu)

First Prize

fuss on a freesia -
a ladybug
makes the sun wobble

(Mihai Pascaru)


Second Place

cool at dawn -
shaking on a freesia
dew drop

(Lucretia Horvath)


Third Place

anniversary -
on the dry freesia
moonlight

(Julia Ralia)


Fourth Place

freesia bouquet -
never forgotten the perfume
of the first date

(Dan Iulian)


Fifth Place

in-between perfusions -
a yellow freesia
changing the colour

(Doina Bogdan Wurm)


Sixth Place

a white freesia
under the burning candle -
my prayer

(Adina Enachescu)


Basarab train station -
the only valuables
a couple of freesia

(Giannis Kourtis)


cloudy sky -
the rainbow tamped into
the basket of freesias

(Luminita Ignea)


withered freesias -
my childhood home
alone at twilight

(Ioana Bud)



Tuesday, April 4, 2017

Pollen



pollen before the wind –
grandma’s door again
with a golden handle

Cristina Pârvu


Pollen is a subtle and fruitful matter. A golden powder being carried by a faceless and bodiless being towards a stigma miraculously apt to perpetuate life and liveliness.

In the natural slippage of suggestions, it cumulates the almost magical prestige of all golden things. The reality that the poem evokes is a rich one, in which the tale is intertwined with the real world. The golden doorknob reopens the realm full of fabulous promises of the beginnings.  

Comment by Corneliu Traian Atanasiu

kigo - a rigorous template?



cold wind still
under my coat – in the nostrils only
flying petals



Seasons and time are not made according to the rigorous template that the kigo’s maniacs wish to impose. Spring and winter are fighting long before a definite decision. It is natural that some haiku glorify moments of apotheosis for seasonal words, and others to let them face the natural indecision of the weather and of the world.

One who enjoy the facts and also the genuine atmosphere of real haiku moments has no choice but to evoke them as they happen to be. And to enjoy them equally.

As for the poem, it avoids involving the author and it leaves what you can feel up to anyone. One can say that the wind is still tolerated, while the nostrils already aspire to and are somehow satisfied with just the fragrance of what is to come.


poem and comment by Corneliu Traian Atanasiu 

Friday, March 3, 2017

Romanian Monthly Kukai Results February 2017

Theme:
using the word: winter evening/ night




Special prize

Paul-Mircea Iordache

the chimney smoke
boring slowly the moon -
winter night


First place 
Eduard Țară

winter night -
the sickle moon cuts
the last icicle


Second place 
Argentina Stanciu

winter night -
between the village and the universe
wisps of smoke

Third place 
Paul-Mircea Iordache

the chimney smoke
boring slowly the moon  -
winter night

Naomi Gaidur

winter evening -
alongside my grandmother
only the  crutches


Fourth place 
Florin Florian

winter night -
a spider weaves at the frame loom
the moon's light


Fifth place 
Daniela Lăcrămioara Capotă

winter night -
warming up the roadside cross
only a candle

Mihai Mateiciuc

winter evening -
requiem for a cricket
in the attic

Sixth place 

Gabriela Vlad

winter night -
shadows of wolves hunting
shadows of hinds

Constantin Iliescu

winter night -
a painter prepares himself
the whiteness  of snow

Letiția Iubu

winter night -
only the owl's hooting
breaks the silence

Sunday, January 22, 2017

Romanian Weekly Kukai no. 479


First place
Constantin Iliescu

with the stream -
the moon wrapping itself
on the mill wheel


Second place
Dan Norea

Winter at the museum -
admiring Boticelli's
Spring


Third place
Vasilica Grigoraș

mid of January -
at the poetry evening
the wind's recital


Mentions

Ioana Bud

show at the rink -
watching a star in the sky
the orphan child

Luminița Ignea

untilled field -
tormented by thoughts
the old miller

Vasile Conioși-Mesteșanu

winter sun -
only the poplars' shadow
on the entire ice

Valeria Tamaș

first snow -
white as snow in the barn
the cast-iron cauldron

Marcela Ignătescu

on last journey -
memories of other times
gently dripping

Dani S.C. Pop

the frost sharpening
diamonds in the windows -
needy grandparents

Wednesday, January 4, 2017

Romanian Monthly Kukai Results December 2016


Theme: 
using the word: foggy/steamed window 





Special prize


Lucreția Horvath


loneliness


if it had been the window 
lightly steamed 

Letiția Iubu


between them only 

the lime tea fragrance -

the steamed window

1st  Place
Florin Florian

no donor -
only on the steamed window
the daughter's heart

2nd Place
Marcela Ignătescu

the steamed window -
the old teapot on the hot plate
breaks the silence

3rd  Place
Eduard Țară

a steamed window -
cropping from the universe 
several stars

4th Place
Daniela-Lăcrămioara Capotă

a railway station for two -
on a steamed window
an empty heart

Valer G. Pop

on the steamed window
drawing mother's face -
orphan child

Dan Norea

a drawing for Santa -
on the steamed window
the father's face

5th Place

Maria Tirenescu

commuter train -
art Gallery
on a steamed window 


Argentina Stanciu

word mother
on steamed windows -
children's home

6th Place
Nadin Ghileschi

Christmas night -
in the childhood  home
no steamed window